Sigh. So perfectly sad and beautiful and wistful. Oh to be on an Australian beach right now when it's still cold in Canada and the rain is almost snow. Lovely, Lily, truly lovely.
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Sigh. So perfectly sad and beautiful and wistful.
ReplyDeleteOh to be on an Australian beach right now when it's still cold in Canada and the rain is almost snow.
Lovely, Lily, truly lovely.
Just beautiful writing throughout this whole piece.
ReplyDeleteLast sentence tugs at the heart.
My first FF read. Lovely. I want to visit the beach now.
ReplyDeletePerfect, and you capture that feel of the bonfire ritual.
ReplyDeleteI love the attention to detail of this one. How the unrequited love marks every hair, every pore of her skin as you describe it. Lovely, human stuff
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very intricate and descript. nice piece Lilly. congrats btw on your recent pub!
ReplyDeleteLyrically gorgeous Lily - one of your best I'd say.
ReplyDeleteThe details in this are beautiful, Lily!
ReplyDelete"Venus a lighthouse keeping watch" - beautiful! Sad story, movingly told.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, lyrical, wistful - all the good things.
ReplyDeleteAw, so bittersweet. This was absolutely beautiful in details and I could just imagine the beauty of this place.
ReplyDeleteI want to come visit. This place sounds remarkably beautiful, but the heartache is acutely felt, too. So good to read your work, as always! ~ Olivia
ReplyDeleteLovely use of nature to convey human emotion.
ReplyDeleteI especially like "eyes discovering forgotten salt that stings like the devil." -really fine final sentence.
ReplyDeleteLovely, absolutely lovely.
ReplyDeleteThat last line is a killer.
Oh how I want to be on a beach right now...
ouch... heartbreaker.
ReplyDeleteSo wonderfully detailed, I can almost smell the ocean.
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I too, loved the last line.
ReplyDeleteYou paint a vivid scene.